Develop Ideas with Sufficient Detail
Avoid superficial or vague answers: In order to achieve a high score, you need to develop your ideas thoroughly with supporting details such as examples, explanations, statistics, or reasons. Superficial answers that don’t go beyond surface-level statements can negatively impact your score.
Example:
- Weak Idea (Superficial): “Social media is harmful.”
- Strong Idea (Detailed): “Social media has contributed to the rise of mental health issues, particularly among teenagers. A study conducted by the American Psychological Association found that teenagers who spend more than three hours a day on social media platforms are more likely to report symptoms of anxiety and depression, largely due to cyberbullying and unrealistic comparisons with others.”
Support your ideas with examples: Providing real-world examples or statistical evidence adds depth to your argument. These examples should be relevant to the topic and help to clarify your points.
Example:
- “For instance, in a recent survey conducted by the World Health Organization, it was reported that 1 in 5 teenagers suffer from anxiety due to the pressures of maintaining a social media presence.”
Balance both sides (if required): In a discussion essay, for example, you are expected to develop both sides of the argument equally before stating your own opinion.
Example Task:
- Some people believe that the government should invest more in public transport. Others think the government should focus on road infrastructure. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Correct Approach: Discuss the merits of both sides, then clearly present your view with supporting arguments.